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The Story of a Bear

Name: Anonymous 2013-08-05 3:40

I will tell you a story of a bear. He fought a great battle with lion and leopard to protect his cubs. When he was wounded, traders found him and sold him to circus.

He was put on a chain, and they put a ring in his nose, and he was made to dance. The people would mock him, and so would the beasts. His cubs were devoured or brought into captivity.

One day the chain was no longer there. The bear and the traders were gone. He kept running in circles as if the chain was there for several more seasons, but he learned that his strength is coming back, and that he can again be a terror for other beasts and a protection for his cubs and for the forest.

This is the story of the bear.

in Christ

Name: Anonymous 2013-08-05 3:43

The bear and the traders were gone.
Wait, what?  The bear was gone?  Where to?  Why does he keep running in circles in the next sentence? How does this relate to conspiracy theories about Intel pushing on-hardware JS?

OP, you show some promise, but you have a long way to go as a storyteller.

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