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Care to critique?

Name: Anonymous 2013-01-15 21:35

I know it's a drag reading other people's shit. But anyway. I have a website with a friend. He's into photography, I'm into writing. So it's a mix of that, naturally. But anyway. Here are some links to stuff that I've written. Would be much obliged if you could read it, and leave a comment here if you feel inspired to - whatever its nature.

http://theunquietvoid.net/2013/01/15/a-dark-revelation/
http://theunquietvoid.net/2012/12/18/night/ - a poem
http://theunquietvoid.net/2012/10/24/smoke-dreams/
http://theunquietvoid.net/2012/04/29/jerry/ - longer story

Most are all short, aside from Jerry, which is around 3000 words.

Thanks for reading.

Name: Anonymous 2013-01-31 12:57

jew

Name: Anonymous 2013-01-31 14:52

gaaay

Name: Anonymous 2013-02-17 3:33

A wall of text full of uncommon (english is by far not my first language, so I know what I'm talking about) words and adjectives and long sentences?

Name: Anonymous 2013-02-18 14:37

REVELATIONS REVELATIONS EVERYWHERE

Name: Anonymous 2013-02-25 19:53

I love your writing style. It reminds me of mine, except you seem to go out of your way to use big words. Sometimes it ruins the flow a little bit.

Name: Anonymous 2013-03-04 21:57

Bro, tone down the big word usage. This is a flaw of many writers.

Name: Anonymous 2013-03-08 16:25

Thanks for those who've replied, and those who took the time out to read my stuff.

6 & 7; I don't go out of my way to use longer words. I very rarely look up words to use, so most of my writing is coming out of my current vocabulary, at least. I take on board though that a more concise description of things often wins people over. Thank you for the compliment, too.

Someone like Cormac McCarthy, however, isn't afraid of mixing a highly latinate vocabulary up with more populist ways of communicating. I think I appreciate finding the exact word, rather than a popular equivalent.

Name: Anonymous 2013-03-22 22:45

You're really just a pretentious little prat, eh?

Name: Anonymous 2013-03-25 13:37

No, not really. Just trying to do something, I suppose. I'm pretty aware that this might all be garbage but it seems better than doing nothing.

Name: Anonymous 2013-03-26 8:35

>I think I appreciate finding the exact word, rather than a popular equivalent.
>You're really just a pretentious little prat, eh?
>No, not really.

Mhm.

Name: Anonymous 2013-03-27 20:22

Words are there to be used, it doesn't make me pretentious to pick them. I try to isolate the specific thing I want to explain, otherwise, what's the point? If you can do that with more commonly used words, then fine. Sad and morose mean different things, the latter is not a "pretentious" equivalent of the latter, but often "sad" will be used as a catch-all word.

Also, I didn't exactly make a judgement call on the value of popular (i.e. commonly used) words - obviously the huge bulk of a piece's vocabulary relies on them, but they garner no attention because people focus on words that are unusual or long.

Name: Anonymous 2013-04-01 23:59

I have no problem with using big words, as long as they fit. Sometimes they sound a little bit out of place. The way someone McCarthy (who, by the way, is my favorite author) does it, is beautiful and poetic because it flows so well with the rest of his prose. He's not afraid to use big words, but he's also not afraid to write simply.

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