Critique me

hey guys,
i was wondering if anyone would be interested in critiquing a poem i just wrote recently? kind of rough but id really like some opinions. (sorry this is kind of tangent to the purpose of this forum)

Way too long, too sparse on content, not even a hint of insight. Hopelessly cartoony, filled with second-hand imagery, like something stitched together out of 1990-era Jeep and Ford commercials.