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Just something I wrote up.

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-23 14:07 ID:shXRXzy7

Tell me if you want to read more:


Limp, the body of Gorrister hung from the pink palette; unsupported—hanging high above us in
the computer chamber; and it did not shiver in the chill, oily breeze that blew eternally through
the main cavern. The body hung head down, attached to the underside of the palette by the sole
of its right foot. It had been drained of blood through a precise incision made from ear to ear
under the lantern jaw. There was no blood on the reflective surface of the metal floor.

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-23 14:08 ID:shXRXzy7

When Gorrister joined our group and looked up at himself, it was already too late for us to
realize that, once again, AM had duped us, had had its fun; it had been a diversion on the part of
the machine. Three of us had vomited, turning away from one another in a reflex as ancient as
the nausea that had produced it.
Gorrister went white. It was almost as though he had seen a voodoo icon, and was afraid of the
future. "Oh, God," he mumbled, and walked away. The three of us followed him after a time,
and found him sitting with his back to one of the smaller chittering banks, his head in his hands.
Ellen knelt down beside him and stroked his hair. He didn't move, but his voice came out of his
covered face quite clearly. "Why doesn't it just do us in and get it over with? Christ, I don't know
how much longer I can go on like this."
It was our one hundred and ninth year in the computer.
He was speaking for all of us.
Nimdok (which was the name the machine had forced him to use, because AM amused itself
with strange sounds) was hallucinating that there were canned goods in the ice caverns. Gorrister
and I were very dubious. "It's another shuck," I told them. "Like the goddam frozen elephant
AM sold us. Benny almost went out of his mind over that one. We'll hike all that way and it'll be
putrified or some damn thing. I say forget it. Stay here, it'll have to come up with something
pretty soon or we'll die."

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-23 17:01 ID:2Q99ZyiH

Hm, the formatting of the page really isn't merciful to your story. I'm sorry, I can't read something like that.

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-23 17:48 ID:yI6jdxVV

The booming voice boomed:

"I WILL REFORMAT YOUR SOULS!"

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-23 18:25 ID:Heaven

tl;dr

sage tho

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-23 18:46 ID:FVFbatLD

>>3

What do you mean?

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-24 5:20 ID:KOVjmwV9

>>1

Fuck you and your plagiarism. Go back to primary school.

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-24 8:03 ID:2KeGaUqX

>>7

Fuck you!

I WANT MOA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-24 11:09 ID:8OM4KB5a

>>4
booming voice boomed
redundancy is redundant

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-24 14:12 ID:AW/eGukH

hanging high above us in the computer chamber; and it did not shiver in the chill, oily breeze that blew eternally through
the main cavern.
You're trying too hard.

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-24 14:40 ID:a5Lf8vdP

MOAR PLOZ!

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-25 6:25 ID:lIycFUf9

>>8

It's "I have not mouth and I must scream" by Harlan Ellison, one of the grand daddies of modern Sci Fi. >>1 Had nothing at all to do with its conception, prose, or publication. They are a godless cock sucker taking credit for the work of others.

That is all.

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-25 11:56 ID:DW1WA/6G

>>12
that would explain why it sucked then Ellison is a no talent douche

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-25 12:02 ID:B67Jibuh

>>12

Is a lying bitch! That is MY STORY YOU DOUCHE!!

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-25 12:03 ID:B67Jibuh

Benny shrugged. Three days it had been since we'd last eaten. Worms. Thick, ropey.
Nimdok was no more certain. He knew there was the chance, but he was getting thin. It couldn't
be any worse there, than here. Colder, but that didn't matter much. Hot, cold, hail, lava, boils or
locusts—it never mattered: the machine masturbated and we had to take it or die.
Ellen decided us. "I've got to have something, Ted. Maybe there'll be some Bartlett pears or
peaches. Please, Ted, let's try it."

I gave in easily. What the hell. Mattered not at all. Ellen was grateful, though. She took me twice
out of turn. Even that had ceased to matter. And she never came, so why bother? But the
machine giggled every time we did it. Loud, up there, back there, all around us, he snickered. It
snickered. Most of the time I thought of AM as it, without a soul; but the rest of the time I
thought of it as him, in the masculine … the paternal … the patriarchal … for he is a jealous
people. Him. It. God as Daddy the Deranged.
We left on a Thursday. The machine always kept us up-to-date on the date. The passage of time
was important; not to us, sure as hell, but to him … it … AM. Thursday. Thanks.
Nimdok and Gorrister carried Ellen for a while, their hands locked to their own and each other's
wrists, a seat. Benny and I walked before and after, just to make sure that, if anything happened,
it would catch one of us and at least Ellen would be safe. Fat chance, safe. Didn't matter.
It was only a hundred miles or so to the ice caverns, and the second day, when we were lying out
under the blistering sun-thing he had materialized, he sent down some manna. Tasted like boiled
boar urine. We ate it.

On the third day we passed through a valley of obsolescence, filled with rusting carcasses of
ancient computer banks. AM had been as ruthless with its own life as with ours. It was a mark of
his personality: it strove for perfection. Whether it was a matter of killing off unproductive
elements in his own world-filling bulk, or perfecting methods for torturing us, AM was as
thorough as those who had invented him—now long since gone to dust—could ever have hoped.
There was light filtering down from above, and we realized we must be very near the surface.
But we didn't try to crawl up to see. There was virtually nothing out there; had been nothing that
could be considered anything for over a hundred years. Only the blasted skin of what had once
been the home of billions. Now there were only five of us, down here inside, alone with AM.

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-25 12:45 ID:A6zgwamp

>>1
What?

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-25 13:00 ID:cYfG21Xu

Benny shrugged. Three days it had been since we'd last eaten. Worms. Thick, ropey.
Nimdok was no more certain. He knew there was the chance, but he was getting thin. It couldn't
be any worse there, than here. Colder, but that didn't matter much. Hot, cold, hail, lava, boils or
locusts—it never mattered: the machine masturbated and we had to take it or die.
Ellen decided us. "I've got to have something, Ted. Maybe there'll be some Bartlett pears or
peaches. Please, Ted, let's try it."

I gave in easily. What the hell. Mattered not at all. Ellen was grateful, though. She took me twice
out of turn. Even that had ceased to matter. And she never came, so why bother? But the
machine giggled every time we did it. Loud, up there, back there, all around us, he snickered. It
snickered. Most of the time I thought of AM as it, without a soul; but the rest of the time I
thought of it as him, in the masculine … the paternal … the patriarchal … for he is a jealous
people. Him. It. God as Daddy the Deranged.
We left on a Thursday. The machine always kept us up-to-date on the date. The passage of time
was important; not to us, sure as hell, but to him … it … AM. Thursday. Thanks.

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Name: Anonymous 2007-09-25 13:14 ID:LjNaGC/+

>>17

YOU HAVE NO RIGHT TO VIOLATE MY COPYRIGHT BY COPYING MY TEXT!!!!!!!
I CALL THE POLICE TO ARREST YOU!!

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-25 15:41 ID:hf0MIZnE

What do you think about my post (>>15)?
Do you like the story so far?

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-26 13:35 ID:1r7jXTa9

bump

Name: Anonymous 2007-09-26 19:47 ID:BJwhhy4p

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Name: Anonymous 2007-09-27 9:49 ID:qe3HkJCm

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