i am making or trying to make a light novel but i am completely stuck as two how i should start it, anyone care to help be bounce ideas?
here is what i got.
a boy wakes up in a house, he has no memories and is in pain from a event that he cant remember, he walk outside and looks at the surrounding, he notices a path and decides to go down it.
He now realizes he doesn't remember his one name and stop for a moment in panic. he then take in the idea that someone was obviously taking care of him so at least someone knows who he is. a great sigh of relief falls him and he continues the path that he decided to take.
After a while of talking he realizes that his strength was fading. So to try and regain from the sudden dizziness of that walk he sets down for a moment. He reaches into his pockets hoping that he could find something that may belong to him, but to no luck. not a single item is on him, another sigh came out his moth.
"Who am I?, maybe i should head back to the-"
a tree just exploded next to him!! and he fell a few feet away from the rock he was planted on. he coughed a few time and rubbed his eyes to see what just happened. As the dust began to settle he realized that a shape started to form were the tree once was.
what do u think should happen next?
i will except any subjections to this topic
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afro man2009-05-01 16:42
aye. i know. he sees a guy(black guy)with a afro around his age with some cool looking clothes. and the guy has a a.k 47 on his back. and a misile launcher in his hand, and when all the dust has cleared the boy sees the man fighting an unknown enemy in a suit who knows a special form of karate.(maybe you could make it a girl or something.) and the afro guy can also know karate.
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afro man2009-05-01 16:48
also the afro man has a really cool scyth just in case he runs out of bullets or if bullets dont work on enemies
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OP2009-05-05 23:24
thats quite interesting, instead of me righting something lets make a string and make it an entire little 4chan novelty fan-fiction?
i'll add this to it right now
He was still a little shaken up from the explosion and started to look up to see the assailant. he was waring a black suit. I stude up from the ground and shook wiped some of the debree from the tree.
"WH-WHO ARE YOU!? What do u want from me!?"
The man in the suit was now completely visible now. he was carrying some kind of gun in his hand and was aimed at me in surprise, his other hand was on his a handle of a weapon strapped to his back. He jumped to the left as another explosion washed away the reaming stump from the first explosion. He now seen another person who was now chasing the suited one. ("should i be happy? or should i just get the hell out of here before I'm a target!?") "time to run!!" he ran back down the path he was traveling hoping that he could be safe from the battle taking place just a few paces back. He was still exhausted from his unknown injuries. The house is now in sight! he runs up to the door and his about to open it but only to here "so, u made it back here did you? hehehe" a sweet but tainted voice said as he slowly locked up in his place. should I turn around and face the person or should i try and escape inside? A hand breaks threw the door and it flies into the room i was going to escape into.
"You where not going to go into that room without me where you?"
the voice seamed to echo threw my head, she seamed to have a more aggravated sound to it.
"Why are u after me what did i do!?"
She turned me around and i got a good look at her face from here
she had blue eyes and a hand covered in darkness holding me shoulder. she had a smile that made me feel that if i said the wrong thing i would be killed.
"is... is this your place"
She smiled a little more pleasantly. "why yes it is and you are my property~"
dat sounds awsome. dont know bout yall but i like it.
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op2009-05-07 3:14
thanks. i just like writing stuff and i like to try new things all the time. this would be somewhat new. normally i just write something then wait a few weeks and right some more. but hey this is pretty fun. anyway how about a little more to chew on ^^
What the hell!? Her property!? you have git to be kidding me!? i have to stay calm or this will end in me most likely in even worse shape. then it dawned on him. (What if she was the one who mangled me!?) and my loss of memory could be her fault too.
"What do u mean I'm your property!?" He said in a somewhat angry tone. which by the way just made her use the hand that was on his shoulder to almost break his shoulder blade.
"Now now now, you are my property in tell i decide to blow you to bits~" she said to him with a more sinister look on her face. but that look was cut short as she grabbed his shoulder and threw him to the right as she jumped into the air and blasted the suited man with a wave of what appeared to be just a blotch of darkness. there wasn't even any remain to him!! she walked back to where he was laying on the ground and pulled him to his feet.
"Welcome Home~"
ok so i will now grab what i have and refine it to make it a little more appealing. and that will be my next post but, if anyone who reads it (like afro man) let me know about what i should do with the next part. i am currently thinking about a small explanation scene about a couple of things and a trip to the town that resides but the mountains next to the forest cabin/house.
well lets see. dat sounds interesting. ok. is the black guy n the suit the a good guy. his he going to be one of the main characts
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op2009-05-12 22:08
you have to keep reading the story. This is chapter one.
A boy wakes up in a house, he has no memories and is in pain from a event that he can't remember, he walk outside and looks at the surrounding, he notices a path and decides to go down it.
He now realizes he doesn't remember his name and stop for a moment in panic. He then take in the idea that someone was obviously taking care of him so at least someone knows who he is. a great sigh of relief falls him and he continues the path that he decided to take.
After a while of talking he realizes that his strength was fading. So to try and regain from the sudden dizziness of that walk he sits down for a moment. He reaches into his pockets hoping that he could find something that may belong to him, but to no luck. not a single item is on him, another sigh came out his moth.
"Who am I?, maybe i should head back to the-"
a tree just exploded next to him!! and he fell a few feet away from the rock he was planted on. he coughed a few time and rubbed his eyes to see what just happened. As the dust began to settle he realized that a shape started to form were the tree once was.
He was still a little shaken up from the explosion and started to look up to see the assailant. he was waring a black suit. I stude up from the ground and wiped some of the debree from the tree.
"WH-WHO ARE YOU!? What do you want from me!?"
The man in the suit was now completely visible now. he was carrying some kind of gun in his hand and was aimed at me in surprise, his other hand was on his a handle of a weapon strapped to his back. He jumped to the left as another explosion washed away the reaming stump from the first explosion. He now seen another person who was now chasing the suited one. ("should i be happy? or should i just get the hell out of here before I'm a target!?") "time to run!!" he ran back down the path he was traveling hoping that he could be safe from the battle taking place just a few paces back. He was still exhausted from his unknown injuries. The house is now in sight! he runs up to the door and he is about to open it but only to here "so, you made it back here did you? hehehe" a sweet but tainted voice said as he slowly locked up in his place. should I turn around and face the person or should i try and escape inside? A hand breaks threw the door and it flies into the room he was going to escape into.
"You where not going to go into that room without me where you?"
the voice seamed to echo threw his head, she seamed to have a more aggravated sound to it.
"Why are you after me what did i do!?"
She turned me around and he got a good look at the girl that now held his shoulder down to the side of the door frame that managed to stay intact.
she had blue eyes and the hand holding him in place seemed to be shrouded in darkness. She had black hair that was about neck length. She wasn't a bad looking girl but the expression on her face seemed to make him want to be as fare away from her as possible. He decided to make a quick conversation
"is... is this your place" he said in a voice that was calm as he could possible make it. She smiled a little more pleasantly. "Why yes, it is and you are my property~" thous words echo in his head for a moment. Did she really mean that he is her property or was he mistaken? What did you just say? I'm not sure I herd you correctly. Did you say I'm on your property? She smiled and shook her head “No you are my property. But yes this is also my place.~” she said in a triumphant voice.
(What the hell!? Her property!? you have git to be kidding me!? I have to stay calm or this will end in me most likely in even worse shape. then it dawned on him. What if she was the one who mangled me!? and my loss of memory could be her fault as well.
"What do u mean I'm your property!?" He said in a somewhat angry tone. which by the way just made her use the hand that was on his shoulder to almost break his shoulder blade.
"Now now now, you are my property in tell I decide to blow you to bits~" she said to him with a more sinister look on her face. but that look was cut short as she threw him to the right as she jumped into the air and blasted the suited man with a wave of what appeared to be just a blotch of darkness. there wasn't even any remain to him!! she walked back to where he was laying on the ground and pulled him to his feet with the same shoulder she threw him with. She then walked to the house and said
"Welcome Home~"
they now sat in the house. He of course tried not to make any a tempt to have a conversation with her in the fear that he too will fall victim to her power that she used. Instead he tried to imagine how this is even a possibility. They looked like they where flying or at least jump at heights his head said wasn't natural. Even though he had no memories of what has happened in his passed, he new this stuff wasn't normal, and worst of is that he is now being captive by a girl. She looked over his way with a bored expression on her face, she raised her hand and a dark orb appeared by her hand. In a panic he jump to the ground thinking she was about to finish him off for fun.
“oh, don't worry I haven't even had fun with you yet. Whats the point of a toy if I don't get to play with it for a while. Plus I had to keep taking care of you for over two months now, you should be happy I didn't just kill you the moment I found you.” she now looked a little less bored and stared at him. “So whats your name?” He was afraid she just wanted to know it to put on a tomb stone. He thought for a moment. She looked like she was starting to get angry at him.
“I.. I don't know, I can't recall who I am or how I got to this place.” She stood up and walked to the door. “If you want to live I would suggest you come with me. Or you can stay here and make a nice little item I can place by your grave, its your choice of course~” Some choice!! he stood up and ran to the door. “Oh, what a petty. I was hoping that you where good at making things.” NOT if it involves the preparations for my demise!!
they are now outside and she grabs him and they are completely covered in darkness. The next moment they are back in the bright sun. He looked around to see that they are now in a town. She walks into the building they happened to be in front of. And he just stands there absorbing all of the scenery and trying to comprehend what just took place.
and to answer bingo. I do not know if he will be a main character. but i was thinking of making him a main ravel or a comedy relief since he does ware such weird things
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Anonymous2009-05-13 1:58
Your writing is shit. Learn how to use proper spelling and grammar.
And indent shit, jesus.
Your idea COULD have potential.
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Anonymous2009-05-13 2:18
This is the worst thing I have read since Christian Humber Reloaded. I spent five minutes looking it over and those are five minutes I will never have back.
In the name of all that is holy, stop writing now.
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Anonymous2009-05-13 3:54
mmm if you can do better than add what happens next. show us all how much better you are than op. he stated that this was a open project. so far only one suggestion about the writing or ideas was mentioned.
oh and number 10 and 11 are the same person so op don't be discouraged by them.
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banana band2009-05-13 15:32
how about the building they went to at the end is a hospital, and they are meeting the black guy there? dat would be neet.
Numba ten 10 needs to go suck a dick. the story goes hard so far. make the black guy a good guy. there aint enough black guys dat are the good guys in anime
why he got to be wearing wierd clothing. make him have som swagg about him. if you seen the movie blade, the vampire /hybrid. have him wearing clothes like dat.
( if you dont know swagg means how you dress and act.) listen to the song "swagga like us"
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jo jo.2009-05-16 15:15
ay. make it where all the ladys love the black guy. give him a six pack and alot of muscles but not t buff