Critique My Poetry

~CJM~

you piece of shit. you
are a sun-dried dog turd full
of broken warm glass

i saw an old man
fill a popcan with skoal phleghm
you are that popcan

i saw an old man
spit until his teeth shrank, died
you are the dead teeth

you are a waste land
a fucking fuck fuck fuck fuck
God-damn your  bullshit

Sophomoric.