Our /lang/uage

This is going to be a long post. I might separate it into parts.

/lang/, stay with me for a second here, what if we (the /lang/ collective) were to write, publish, and fluently speak our own language? Wouldn't that be interesting? You remember when you were kids you always had dreams of concocting your own language to speak with your friends and stuff? Same concept, only you probably have the capacity, with a little patience, ingenuity, and help from others, to actually ACCOMPLISH it. This thought came to me a couple days ago, I was listening to "Prenzlaurberg" by Beirut, and since the song sounds like slurred gibberish, I decided to transcribe it the way I heard it/maybe fudge what I hear a little and have it take on its own meaning. I'm going to post a small portion of the song, what I think it would say in the new language. Completely by ear, make your own assumptions for any loanwords that it looks like I used

Prenzlaurforue / District of Prenzlaur (forue being a suffix)
Sol la vor ' manie fonore / The sunshine ' [on] balcony's edge
Zlait crie eurnre remoir / Even when people lament
Sol la vor ' manie fonore / The sunshine ' [on] balcony's edge
Zlait crie em nol dem deed / Even when I'm old and dead
Aicanter toni, zlait au crie / Singing tonight, even still
An lo eisis vai ensom foture / And look, [the] moon's face tells [of the] future
Addolot sem sair por la vire, soilar / [The] neverending sea dances at lit. "the"; in context: "its" call, shaking
Em wachet ver por la vire, taim, taim.../ He abruptly stills at his call, wait, wait...

Literally any question/comments/criticism are welcome, I really hope it can become a success.

>>92
My bad, I used the Russian Cyrillic alphabet (where the backwards E looking thing corresponds to our E sound).
I dunno what we're doing, I thought we'd be using the Russian Cyrillic and the Latin alphabet.

>>94
How will we add the plural marker to the feminine and masculine? Would we just add both on to the verb?

And can we shorten the pronouns? I like how in English they're two and three letters, we should make 1 and 2 letter pronouns.

>>100
Because that's how long every other conlang has taken to make.

 >>109
I like it.

>>108
This seems fine to me.

Anybody who knows any classical langs, add to the vocab please. I'll add what I can from Latin.