What do you think of this?

I am currently developing a language designed for easy learning and to be cool-sounding. Tell me what you think about this:

All sentences have the following order:
Adjective, (Number of) (Each/per/etc quantifiers) Noun (possesive particle) (Noun belonging to previous noun), Time particle, Adjective for object, Object, Adverb, Verb, Question particle.

There are no articles.
There are 6 time particles that decide the sentence time. You add a particle before this one to make it negative:
present
present and still going on
past
past and still going on
future
future and still going on

There are 5 pronouns:
We
I
You
He/she/they
It

The numeric system has numbers 0-9, 10, 100, 1000, and 1000000 at the moment, and three counter particles for things, living beings (plants, animals, people), and for ordinal numbers.

For example 15 keyboards would be: ten-five things keyboard
1st day: one ordinal day
24 people: two-ten-four living-beings person

That, plus around 130 words is what I have developed at the moment. I won't tell the words right now, just tell me what you think about it.